On hold !
Written on 11:00 PM by peter
Now Don't confuse, let's just trade shoes,
Feel how I felt, and see how I dealt,
all this while, with a fake smile,
See how I am on hold, since I just told,
you everything, that I had within,
every single line, that was on my mind,
since so many years, I was hiding tears,
It was never your loss, but I was always on a toss,
this both sided game, only had my name,
and a mere hope, that I would not get any shock,
rather a surprise, & this time the Sun would rise,
from the west, and god would be at his miraculous best,
or else I am just doomed, sulking in a silent room,
not even jealous, but cursing all fellas,
for making me do this, and hope for the bliss,
though they are all right, still I can't just fight,
this battle alone tonight, I need someone by my side,
till I am done with my life, and get customized,
with a new skin, and a soul that would grin,
for no reason, and for every season,
now you know what I mean, as I put this clean,
In front of you, I am all very true,
and it's not a myth, that a confession's death
is a major death, for that one pure faith.
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I'm kinda speechless.It says so much , about all that's hidden. peter u say it best with your poems.
Wow..thats very true and very much rhythmic :)
Very realistic Ashwin :)
Needless to say, it has been beautifully expressed! Though a new reader may not get the gist of the poem n he/she may have to re-read it a couple of times to get the feel of it.
N all that pent-up emotions have been penned in such a subtle way that one gets lost in d feel of each line.
I so wish that you come out of this on-hold situation asap coz only the bearer can know the pain of it!!
With this i also wish if i could just know the inspiration behind these lines..and also the connotation behind "one pure faith"...
Poetry is something which comes so naturally n free-flowing to u :)
....lovely poem!
Maybe sadness and tough times brings out the best in every poet...(just an observation I made)
Take care man..
God bless you!
this is your best one ever.
can't say anything more than that.
read it eminem isshhtyle..no wonder u r his fan...seems u don't hv enough time to edit the html thingy out in the end...doesn't matter it's the thing which u "held on to" that counts :D
nice :)
Now I know... :)
I read it soft style... and it sounds the best this way. It's for real and that makes it THE most beautiful ever...
Call connects soon... I hope... :-w
:-)
I wud rather choose to comment on the comments here... :P
@few of the above ones
where is the poem in this post?
Wow..don't have words.
My fav line :
"It was never your loss, but I was always on a toss,
this both sided game, only had my name"
:)
kudos..
hitter of a post..
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im outta words..it was a magnificent way to carve out ur thoughts out of ur mind...how do you do tht every time?????? :)
Now Don't confuse, let's just trade shoes,
Feel how I felt, and see how I dealt,
all this while, with a fake smile,
I could totally identify with the first three lines of this poem. it said what i couldn't put in words......
it's a very, very beautifully composed verse.
man, u r immensely talented. keep it up!
touche.
:( It was very well written no doubt..but i wish the reason that made u write something like this turns into an inspiration behind ur next hopefully-happy post
You are so good at it... do you know that??
I loved this one to the core. Read it 3 times already, and for the first time not coz I did not understand... but just coz I loved it. :)
Hero!! *winks*
Awesome!
you and I have got same blog template.. btw.. your posts are rocking..
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